Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In the contemporary life, young people have a tendency to join in thrilling sports due to its challenging. However, some individuals assume that governments should inhibit dangerous sports. Personally, it would be better to let them choose whatever sports they like.
In the one hand, in my opinion, I strongly believe that dangerous sports would generate benefits based on majority reasons. Firstly, hazardous sports create positive thinking for countless people participating it. According to the newest report, people joining in thrilling sports often from 20 to 60 years old, that age offer plentiful pressure. Consequently, people need to solve as soon as possible so they seek in dangerous sports. In the pathways, they are obligatory to focus on this sport and get great attempt, and concentration would assist them relax their brain. For instance, my sister said that when she diving in the deep sea, she destroyed desperate things. Some scientists reveal that hazardous sports reinforce the suffering likelihood so people find it easy to face up to several circumstances. Actually, after overcoming challenges means they win by themselves, they would be more confident than they used to. Secondly, people stand a chance to investigate their enormous potentiality. Some individuals having dangerous sports experience said that these sports promote listening and feeling skill. Since then, man would have a good awareness about protecting environments. Eventually, dangerous sports train human carefulness. Because of crucial equipment, they must prepare before participating. For instance, you forget to bring warm clothes when you move to the mountain, you would suffer from freeze temperature, even below 0 degree. Therefore, numerous people always find dangerous sports when they have leisure time since they satisfy the human demands.
In the other hand, I assume that governments should not ban type of this sport. However, they should restrain the frequency of hazardous sports because of bad aspects. According to the statistic, there are 6000 people dying when they join in parachute with impressive height yearly. Alternatively, some people crazy about dangerous sports, even they spend plentiful time joining this sport. For instance, my brother waste 3 years climbing mountain in spite of preventing from other people. As a consequence, governments should control safe equipment providing for attendants, or extended rescue team in order to present in emergency case.
In conclusion, I purely approved that governments should let human choose any sports or activities by the freedom ways.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 617, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'dives'.
Suggestion: dives
... instance, my sister said that when she diving in the deep sea, she destroyed desperat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 24.0651302605 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2214.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 399.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.54887218045 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86864413335 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 176.041082164 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591478696742 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 655.2 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 16.0721442886 156% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.1189171741 49.4020404114 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 88.56 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.96 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.29034516104 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.086003194067 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659803493101 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.199027186523 0.151304729494 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0198241020453 0.056905535591 35% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.61 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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