Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
It is thought that the investment to creative artists such as painters and musicians should be provided by the government, while other people think that alternative sources should fund to professional artists. This essay will analyse these statements in detail and state my a agreement with the former notion.
In the industrialized world and with the appearance of modern technology, the numerber of people who suffer from depression and other types of mental diseases have increase gradually; as a consequence, many advicers believe that alternative sources for artists is greatly significant for the the development of society. First and formost, not only does the government have more revenue for the medical facilities and equipments; as a results, the citizens can improve their mental's life and immnue systerm, but also the quality of education will be advance by their investment, so the propotion of illiterate teenagers will be ruduced dramatically which lead to the positive influence for the economic background of their nation. Furthermore, the limited of finacial source can be lagred since it would be came from the non-profit organization or large companies which have a profusion of benifical for the career of each artists. To illustrate, there was a survey by Bobry Goden which is about the success of European artists who support by the managers of large business. The statistics demonstated that nearly everyone got a plenty of achievement in their career.
On the other hand, i believe that we can not negate the importance of government's funded. The socioeconomic trouble can be lessed because every people will have the equal opportunity to appoarch with the art of some artists without extra fee. Moreover, i think the regions also correlate with a wide range of cognitive behaviors, including memory, self-monitoring and conscious self-awareness, so the government of their regions can be easier to nature and discover talent and ability artists.
To conclude, from my augrment from the essay, the financial source should be contributed by governments and alternative sources, but i believe that the government's investment still keep more special value.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 275, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...these statements in detail and state my a agreement with the former notion. I...
^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y a agreement with the former notion. In the industrialized world and with the...
^^
Line 2, column 231, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... consequence, many advicers believe that alternative sources for artists is great...
^^
Line 2, column 292, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... for artists is greatly significant for the the development of society. First and formo...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 292, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... for artists is greatly significant for the the development of society. First and formo...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 436, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a result' or simply 'results'?
Suggestion: a result; results
...e medical facilities and equipments; as a results, the citizens can improve their mentals...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 1013, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...obry Goden which is about the success of European artists who support by the mana...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lenty of achievement in their career. On the other hand, i believe that we can...
^^
Line 3, column 22, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...in their career. On the other hand, i believe that we can not negate the impo...
^
Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...me artists without extra fee. Moreover, i think the regions also correlate with a...
^
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... discover talent and ability artists. To conclude, from my augrment from the e...
^^
Line 4, column 136, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...overnments and alternative sources, but i believe that the governments investment...
^
Line 4, column 155, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...rnative sources, but i believe that the governments investment still keep more special valu...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, while, i think, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36443148688 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02261364597 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562682215743 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.5048352374 49.4020404114 193% => OK
Chars per sentence: 167.272727273 106.682146367 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.1818181818 20.7667163134 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0909090909 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271257912898 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10371455952 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122497016261 0.0667982634062 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184765004379 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0911404264912 0.056905535591 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.4 13.0946893788 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.55 50.2224549098 63% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 11.3001002004 147% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.4 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.19 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.