Some people think that governments should only focus their spending on public services, and they claim that spending on arts is a waste of money.To what extend do you agree or disagree ?
Nowadays, many people argue that the national investment in arts is nothing but waste of money which can be utilized to fulfill the demand for public services only. Personally, I disagree with this statement because I believe that arts are equally important to allocate for.
On the one hand, I agree that public services are crucial for the existence and development of a country. Firstly, these services offer the physical well-being for citizens and enhances their standard of living in terms of health, education and transportation… For instance, community needs hospitals with all advanced diagnostic equipment like computed tomographic scan which enables to detect diseases at early stages results in fewer moralities. Secondly, spending the lion’s share of budget on public services is an effective method to ease the domestic poverty. The most important sector of the economy is the education as the educational development is one of the crucial requirements for a sustainable growth of a country in a long run. Allocating financial aid to schools definitely lessens the illiteracy rate and heighten people’s intellect, which provides them with job opportunities and helps them to improve their own finances.
On the other hand, I still believe that field of arts has a profound impact on society. While the physical well-being comes from public services, arts enhances the mental well-being for people. To begin with, art is the cultural and historical reflection of every country. The music songs, for example, whether traditional folklore or modern pop songs provide us the relaxing environment and entertainment, within preservation of our cultural inheritance. Without a fund from government, it is difficult to keep them alive and not to sink into posterity’s oblivion. Furthermore, arts creations are the best source of generating revenue income for the government. Museums, arts galleries and music concerts bring marked financial advantages from the increasing number of annual visits. These tourists in historical places and monuments also promote local handicraft and consumption resulting in providing income to the small-scale industries.
In conclusion, I do not believe that financial funding for the art creations is a total wastage. Governments should distribute equal portions of their fund to both highly demanding public-service sectors and arts owing to their own benefits.
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also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57181571816 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09879008351 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.607046070461 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.5273872122 49.4020404114 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.941176471 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7058823529 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41176470588 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152865028676 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0484391512868 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433774227317 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105930638594 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.040835843756 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.16 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 78.4519038076 163% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.