Some people think that international collaboration is necessary to solve the problem of terrorism. To what extent do you agree or disagree with that statement?

Essay topics:

Some people think that international collaboration is necessary to solve the problem of terrorism. To what extent do you agree or disagree with that statement?

A raging storm of disturbing news about terrorism has become headlines of both the local and global press, leading to a belief that an international alliance formed by multiple countries across different continents could put an end to terrorism. I completely agree with this view.

There are ample evidences which prove the necessity of international cooperation against certain extreme groups of terrorists. There is no denying that the world has experienced great suffering from the devastation of terrorism, which could be seen from the recent IS attacks on Paris and Nice in France. Governments from all over the globe need to work hand in hand in order to relieve the grief which even seems to be inconsolable and to prevent further incidents. Furthermore, the countries such as Syria where those terrorism organizations originate and commit rampant crimes without doubt are powerless to maintain order and safety. Therefore, the involvement of more powerful nations would be vital.

On the other hand, opponents of international collaboration have their points based on what they have witnessed. They suppose the heinous attacks on the two cities in France are the outcome of the government’s attempt to eradicate terrorism. They also think this is the matter of the countries which are home to those terrorism organizations. However, I must admit that those thoughts are somewhat groundless. Sooner or later, terrorists would point their guns to every other country and plague people with fear and insecurity, proving the inevitability of going down the step of a modern war. Additionally, the people in Syria, for example, are being slaughtered for no reasons; this is no other than a mass massacre of the innocent. If other countries were afraid to act although fully aware of the helplessness of Syrian governments, the country would fall into anarchy, leading to possible genocide.

In conclusion, I truly believe leaders of different countries in the world should collaborate to end the current killing caused by terrorists.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 355, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'hand in'.
Suggestion: hand in
...ts from all over the globe need to work hand in hand in order to relieve the grief which even s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33024691358 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0129069377 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608024691358 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0620996717 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.133333333 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73333333333 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10703318356 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0355127511204 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0365316926637 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0604346901135 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308451800225 0.056905535591 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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