Some people think most crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In consideration of the fact that the crime rate has been rising at an alarming speed, while some people believe that the human’s innate gene leads to crime, I would argue that various social circumstances such as poverty and inequality might be the two main factors.
On the one hand, some psychologists believe that some crimes are the result of people’s innate personal characteristics. One negative essence of human beings is greediness, and most of people are born with desire for better material conditions. Therefore, some of them may not stand the temptation and thus go astray like taking bribes to satisfy their eagerness for better standard of living.
On the other hand, some people believe that the external factors like poverty and inequality may be the major reasons for crime. Firstly, poverty is considered as a significant root of crime that compels underprivileged people to perform illegal actions. For example, once people’s basic demands such as food and safe refuge cannot be fulfilled due to financial struggles, laws will not have adequate power to deter people from committing crimes to sustain their lives. Secondly, inequality among people in terms of civil rights might be another factor that contributes to crime. For example, when citizen cannot experience the basic rights like access to advanced medical as their privileged counterparts do, their resentment again the unfairness might be inevitably provoked, and this might further lead to misconducts like participating in rebels.
In conclusion, although people’s negative nature may lead to crime, I believe that social circumstances like poor living standards and unfairness among people might be the main factors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 268.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45895522388 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9390742015 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.574626865672 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.8605880359 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.3 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.9 7.06120827912 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.272543803656 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128358684418 0.084324248473 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736833656387 0.0667982634062 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181079912233 0.151304729494 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0142942320112 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 50.2224549098 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.29 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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