Some people think most crimes are the result of circumstances like poverty and other social problems. Others believe that they are caused by people who are bad in nature. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In consideration of the fact that the crime rate has been rising at an alarming speed in recent years, the question of whether this phenomenon originates from external factors like poverty or people’s inside nature has been a matter of much attention. Personally, I support the former more than the latter.
First of all, poverty is a significant root of crime that compels underprivileged people to perform illegal actions. As a matter of fact, many disadvantaged people suffering from unfavorable living conditions break the law just to achieve a fundamental quality of life. For example, once basic demands such as food or safe refuge cannot be fulfilled due to financial struggles, laws will not have adequate power to deter people from committing crimes to sustain their life.
Another significant social problem that may contribute to crime might be inequality among people in terms of civil rights. When citizens cannot experience the same basic rights like access to advanced medical care as their privileged counterparts, their resentment against the unfairness would inevitably be provoked. This might further lead to misconducts such as participating in rebels, which could be an effective approach for those people to relieve their hatred against unjust treatment.
However, it has to be admitted that some cases of crime are the result of innate personal characteristics. One negative essence of human beings might be their greediness, and most people are born with the desire for better material conditions. Therefore, some of them may not stand the temptation and thus go astray like taking bribes to satisfy their eagerness for better standard of living.
To conclude, although certain crime may result from lawbreakers’ inner qualities, I am still convinced that most crime arises from various social circumstances among which poverty and inequality could be the two basic factors.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, thus, as to, for example, such as, as a matter of fact, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43894389439 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92443508709 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.623762376238 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.0192224017 49.4020404114 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.333333333 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17720836442 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675859091705 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03844469912 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100466301821 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0175409100299 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.98 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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