It is true that the question of whether to reward students with excellent academic results or those who showing their great improvements remains a source of controversy in education field. While a number of people believe that student achieving the highest grades deserve rewards, I would argue that praising students who achieve improvements is much more reasonable.
On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why rewards should be given to students with excellent academic performance. Firstly, it could give highly studying competitive environment at school, seeing that students often desire to win prizes. At a consequence, school children could be encouraged to put their efforts into studying for high scores. Secondly, by adopting this approach, students who are outstanding could be given opportunities to nurture their abilities. My secondary school, for example, selects students with high grades for extra classes to develop their capabilities in order to take them to national competitions.
On the other hand, giving encouragement to those who make strides in their studies results is more favorable outcomes. The first reason is that it could give equal chances to every student to receive rewards, rather than only focus on the highest achievers. Instead of feeling disappointed when competing to their top classmates, students who are recognized for their efforts during semester will feel motivated if they are awarded for making significant progress. Another reason is that this form of recognition follows the holistic principle of learning, which is access to world knowledge, not just to gain high scores. Consequently, several common phenomena which occur when examinations approach, including pressure, anxiety or cheating, would be reduced.
In conclusion, although rewarding students with the greatest scores is advantageous in some extent, it seems to me that it would be better to give encouragement to those who have improved their level of performance,
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHETHER[3]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; the question whether
It is true that the question of whether to reward students with excellent acade...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53594771242 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93194630099 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601307189542 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3872826362 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.307692308 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5384615385 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270772415131 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0997237293721 0.084324248473 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670434191767 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18351982107 0.151304729494 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491501153412 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.63 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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