Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
How to educate a child has never ceased to draw public attention and provoke debates. Although it is considered by some that parents play a vital role in defining who their children will become, the issue as to whether school takes this responsibility or not remains controversial. To the best of my knowledge, I’m of the opinion that this is an immensely debatable matter to be analyzed in light of several factors before any conclusion can be drawn.
On one hand, it’s important to recognize that a child spends most of the time at home with their mother and/or father during the first years of childhood so their initial actions are affected and established by imitating their parents. Some argue that at those ages, a child’s action foundation could be not impacted by any happening around them as they still lack awareness and consciously learning. This argument could be true to some extend. However, they should take into account the fact that the process of unconsciously absorbing is the most effective and influenced way of studying. For example, I have a 2-year niece who always answers politely as “Yes, I’m hearing” whenever someone calls her back while may other babies can just say “what” since she imitated as her mom often tried to reply her like that in order to teach her how to give a first polite response. This example indicates that parents is an essential part of educating their offspring to become a valued citizen of the community.
On the other hand, it’s equally instrumental to realize that after first years of a child’s life, schools are necessary environments where children have chances to both obtain academic knowledge and interact in society through activities with their peers and teachers. Based on this, their behaviors tend to change under lessons on generally social standards and acquiring from others. The opponents may hold arguments that a child acquires academic knowledge the most and not be profoundly influenced on behavior as her or his mindset was settled down before enrolling in schools. Nevertheless, they are ignorant of the fact that knowledge and awareness build and change the way that someone behaves gradually over the time and even some teenagers don’t follow their parents’ advice or obligation as they are aware that this given advice is antiquated or antediluvian in modern life nowadays while their parents had not caught up. For instance, thanks to the internet and social media, they get to know that they can contribute to communities in the numerous manners by their innate artistic talents instead of just focusing on learning academic subjects with the aim of finding a suitable job in the future or not wasting time playing sports and developing their unique abilities as obligated by their parents. This demonstrates that the schooling environment holds an irreplaceable role in shaping awareness, knowledge and behavior of each child to define who they will be in society.
In conclusion, under no circumstances, should both parents and schools take a mission on educating children to become a good civilian because can they not only learn from the older persons at home but also obtain knowledge at school and shape mindset through interacting within education environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 206, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...o their children will become, the issue as to whether school takes this responsibility or not...
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Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: SOME_EXTEND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
...ng. This argument could be true to some extend. However, they should take into account...
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Line 3, column 666, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
... who always answers politely as “Yes, I’m hearing” whenever someone calls her back while ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, while, as to, even so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 7.30460921844 246% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 57.0 24.0651302605 237% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 41.998997996 193% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2750.0 1615.20841683 170% => OK
No of words: 535.0 315.596192385 170% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14018691589 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.20363070211 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73093899151 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 296.0 176.041082164 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553271028037 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 847.8 506.74238477 167% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.3309054096 49.4020404114 187% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.875 106.682146367 161% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.4375 20.7667163134 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9375 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177065370778 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610088907472 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0410436133277 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120785109128 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236556244173 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.0946893788 149% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 78.4519038076 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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