Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Being a part of society has pivotal role in children’s social development. Thus, education character which has significant impact to children personality becomes a serious concern in the global issues today. Many people assert that parents should take this responsibility, while other believed that teachers have greater influences than family to shape children into excellent human beings. To my way of thinking, it is likely to be a wise idea if parents and teachers can be integrated to handle this issue.
Parents are the first educator for children. Admittedly, we spent much more time to build foundation of life through parents when we are in early ages such as communicating, standing, and walking. Not only that, but also almost all pupils activities are imitated from parents; therefore, parents are encouraged to be a good role model for their children. Greeting habits; for instance, teaching children to say thank you and please. Hence, they will respect to other people in daily interaction.
Apart from those reasons, there is a common believed that schools are the best place for socialization practices. One reason for this is that schools have well-prepared modules for improving both academic achievements and social emotion skills; besides, schools are facilitators for pupils to meet their peers. Researchers show that group studies in the classroom for the example, are one of the methods to gain toleration and team work skills. This research makes clear that teachers who are sole authorities in the school also have huge responsibility of child’s development. If pupils do not get the proper guidance during the school time, it will affect to their behaviour when they are in the outside school.
In a word, glacing over the immense implications to children’s social development, both parents and teachers should work together to monitor and control children’s behaviour.
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Essay evaluation report
Being a part of society has pivotal role
Being a part of society plays a pivotal role
there is a common believed that
there is a common belief that
Sentence: Thus, education character which has significant impact to children personality becomes a serious concern in the global issues today.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and personality
Sentence: Not only that, but also almost all pupils activities are imitated from parents; therefore, parents are encouraged to be a good role model for their children.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to pupils and activities
Sentence: In a word, glacing over the immense implications to children's social development, both parents and teachers should work together to monitor and control children's behaviour.
Error: glacing Suggestion: No alternate word
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 301 350
No. of Characters: 1559 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.165 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.179 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.738 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.608 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.526 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'well', 'while', 'apart from', 'for instance', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.290598290598 0.247107183377 118% => OK
Verbs: 0.145299145299 0.155533422707 93% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0883190883191 0.0946595960268 93% => OK
Adverbs: 0.034188034188 0.0501214627716 68% => OK
Pronouns: 0.031339031339 0.0437548338989 72% => OK
Prepositions: 0.111111111111 0.122226691241 91% => OK
Participles: 0.02849002849 0.0403226058552 71% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.99570521453 2.80594681477 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.039886039886 0.0326793684256 122% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0712250712251 0.0861772015684 83% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.014245014245 0.021408717616 67% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.011396011396 0.011925033212 96% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1924.0 1933.35771543 100% => OK
No of words: 301.0 316.048096192 95% => OK
Chars per words: 6.39202657807 6.12580529183 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20517956788 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.41196013289 0.374742101984 110% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.31561461794 0.28420135186 111% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.209302325581 0.203846283523 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.136212624585 0.137316102897 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99570521453 2.80594681477 107% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.037074148 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.617940199336 0.56093040696 110% => OK
Word variations: 70.479300418 60.7387585426 116% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0891783567 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0666666667 20.7743622355 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1066384522 49.517814964 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.266666667 127.492653851 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0666666667 20.7743622355 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.933333333333 0.814263465372 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 3.99599198397 0% => OK
Readability: 51.6281284607 49.1944974215 105% => OK
Elegance: 2.04054054054 1.69124875643 121% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.385591750358 0.332605444948 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0938558284673 0.102741220458 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0610646632347 0.0668466124924 91% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.516120937494 0.534860350844 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.156608776699 0.148594505496 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14564650392 0.134430193775 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521712782218 0.0742795772207 70% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.259314219492 0.324371583561 80% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0428074314637 0.0638462369009 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257207431054 0.228012699653 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388307307236 0.058150111329 67% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.68436873747 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.41683366733 146% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 5.90881763527 169% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 2.5751503006 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 10.4468937876 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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