Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additionally funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.Choose which position you most a

Many people think that learning about advertisements and their influence in persuading people to buy the products should be part of the school’s curriculum. However, I disagree with this statement since I feel that teaching about this aspect should be the responsibility of parents, not the schools.

To commence with, advertisements have a great impact on humans and hence, it is required to learn about them. People get influenced by the lucrative ads to buy the things shown on TV without doing any prior research about them. For example, when a fast food restaurant like KFC displays advertisement on TV, almost every youngster starts eating this dish so aggressively that they avoid traditional food and hence ignores the consequences on his health. Other than this, since celebrities are endorsing products, such as Coca Cola, on national television, it just becomes a fashion to buy these things.

On the contrary, learning about advertisements apart from already existing mandatory subjects is not realistic. There are already so many subjects that students have to study in their schools that adding almost everything in the syllabus is not possible. Moreover, parents should guide their children, playing the role of teachers at home to make them aware of the ill-effects of advertisements and how they can actually choose a product, based on its safety and efficacy rather than looking at its brand or the brand ambassador who is promoting it.

To sum up, though it is definitely right that students should learn the influence and impact of advertisements upon the choice of products purchased by people, but school is not the right institution for this as it relates more to the social aspect and hence, parents should work on this area to create awareness about this among their kids.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'parted'?
Suggestion: parted
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, hence, however, look, moreover, so, apart from, for example, i feel, such as, on the contrary, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1518.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16326530612 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.878250506 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595238095238 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 453.6 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.7958332203 49.4020404114 155% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.8 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.4 20.7667163134 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9 7.06120827912 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135611056761 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539046138251 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403581959714 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0815550603524 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0135559632401 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 13.0946893788 134% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.24 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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