Some people think placing advertisements in schools is a great resource for public schools that need additional funding, but others think it exploits children by treating them as a captive audience for corporate sponsors.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
School commercialism has come under immense scrutiny and criticism over the past few decades.
Some may argue that it is fair for public schools to collaborate with advertising companies and benefactors as an alternate stream of raising revenue to offset budget cuts by the governments. It can also be argued, since children are exposed to advertising all the time including in the home-front, one more commercial at schools or on the school bus would not make a difference. On the contrary, recent studies have successfully argued that it is in fact more harmful than previously thought towards the well-being of a growing child.
Such advertising creates bias within a young mind of a child. Rather than nurturing these children to be creative and have strategic thinking, it creates followers. Not only does advertising in schools expose kids to marketing for harmful products, it teaches students that everything is for sale. Research has shown that children who are exposed to excessive advertising face negative repercussions to their health, self-esteem, values, body-image, learning processes and personal development.
Similarly, marketing undermines critical thinking and derails public education's most important mission of helping children become active, thinking participants in a democratic society. Schools can either educate students to become good citizens or train them to become passive consumers. They can't do both.
In conclusion, at the outset, these schemes would have seemed like a good idea initially. But in the end, it is apparent they benefit only the agencies, while harming students and leaving school with little to show for their efforts.
It is my belief that kids are of course exposed to advertising all the time, but schools should not endorse and add to the constant marketing messages in kids’ lives which may be detrimental to their development towards a whole individual.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'if', 'may', 'similarly', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'of course', 'on the contrary']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.256024096386 0.247107183377 104% => OK
Verbs: 0.165662650602 0.155533422707 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.102409638554 0.0946595960268 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.039156626506 0.0501214627716 78% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0421686746988 0.0437548338989 96% => OK
Prepositions: 0.117469879518 0.122226691241 96% => OK
Participles: 0.0602409638554 0.0403226058552 149% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.12459363749 2.80594681477 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.039156626506 0.0326793684256 120% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0722891566265 0.0861772015684 84% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0210843373494 0.021408717616 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00602409638554 0.011925033212 51% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1934.0 1933.35771543 100% => OK
No of words: 297.0 316.048096192 94% => OK
Chars per words: 6.51178451178 6.12580529183 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20517956788 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.444444444444 0.374742101984 119% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.363636363636 0.28420135186 128% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.245791245791 0.203846283523 121% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.171717171717 0.137316102897 125% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12459363749 2.80594681477 111% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.037074148 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612794612795 0.56093040696 109% => OK
Word variations: 69.0051901041 60.7387585426 114% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0891783567 75% => OK
Sentence length: 24.75 20.7743622355 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.9756398223 49.517814964 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.166666667 127.492653851 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.75 20.7743622355 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.814263465372 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38877755511 137% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.99599198397 125% => OK
Readability: 61.1136363636 49.1944974215 124% => OK
Elegance: 1.75609756098 1.69124875643 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167001505273 0.332605444948 50% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0875079234326 0.102741220458 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0547568323381 0.0668466124924 82% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.664098757176 0.534860350844 124% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.220772789007 0.148594505496 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710945888118 0.134430193775 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585573335021 0.0742795772207 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.163009704106 0.324371583561 50% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0657743662342 0.0638462369009 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0877767909453 0.228012699653 38% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453266280643 0.058150111329 78% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.68436873747 58% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.41683366733 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 4.0 5.90881763527 68% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 2.5751503006 233% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 10.0 10.4468937876 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.