Some people think that prison sentences should not be used to deal with criminals. Education and skills training should be used instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In today’s world, most countries show a great concern about the problems of crime. It is thought that to deal with criminals, prison sentenced should not be used. To put it in another way, education and job training should be used as alternatives to prison sentences. From my perspective, I am totally convinced by this statement.
To begin with, the most frequent factor contributing to this view is that a large number of people committed crime because of the lack of education. Therefore, they are unable to aware of the legal and illegal activities as well as the right and wrong actions. In fact, in the mountainous areas of Vietnam, there was a significant rate of people who have the scarcity of education. When being interrogated, they said that they do not know that their actions are misconducts. As this example reveals, the culprit which lets people commit offence is the shortage of education. As a result, education should be applied to solve criminals rather than prison sentences.
In addition, one explanation to support this claim is that the cost of running and managing prisons is often costly. That means the government needs to invest much money on facilities and security. Hence, it will pose the government’s fund at the risk of being exhausted. This is shown by the following statistics. According to the reported figure of Justice, The FY 2019 budget request for the Federal Prison System totals $7,141 million to construct and recover the facility of jails. As this example suggests, upholding prisons demands a great sum of money from the government. Consequently, prison sentences should be stopped to save the expenditure spent for this purpose.
Given the aforementioned points, it may be concluded that prison sentences should make way for education and job training to figure out the issues regarding crimes because of its benefits mentioned above. For that reason, I wholly agree with the statement brought up.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'figuring'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: figuring
...make way for education and job training to figure out the issues regarding crimes because...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, hence, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, well, in addition, in fact, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07476635514 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81904440969 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595015576324 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 494.1 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.60326502 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.7368421053 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8947368421 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 7.06120827912 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310894832832 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.087879298995 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107023353643 0.0667982634062 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.192883329594 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738355177449 0.056905535591 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.83 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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