Some people think that public health within a country can be improved by government making laws regarding nutritious food. Others, however, think that health is a matter of personal choice and responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In today’s world, most countries have shown great concern about public health. When this issue comes into views, there exists many conflicting opinions. Some people share the view that only by passing laws related to nutritious food could the government improve the health of citizens. Meanwhile, other people are of the view that health is the problem relying on private choice and responsibility. Both of the views have their own merits which require careful consideration.
On the one hand, some people strongly agree that the government should make laws to regulate the problems which refer to public health, especially the diseases. This is shown by the following example. A recent Australian study based on dietary intake data estimated the consequences of an additional 20% on SSBs which stands for sugar-sweetened beverages in Australia on health and health care expenditure. The results indicate that a 20% tax on SSBs would result in an average 12.6% decline in daily consumption of SSBs, and a decline in obesity of 2.7% in men and 1.2% in women over a lifetime. Moreover, this study concluded that there would be sustained reductions in the incidence of diabetes, cardiovascular disease, and some cancers. Therefore, it is clear that regulations made by governments could bring a positive impact on the health of citizens.
On the other hand, some argue that people are responsible for their own health. Whatever laws are issued by the government, it is no use if individuals still consume what they like without worrying whether these types of foods are good for their health. In fact, despite many laws passed by the government to try to limit the number of people eating fast food, there are about 85 million Americans who eat fast food on any given day. For this reason, it is obvious that in this case, public health depends on the determination of each person.
Given the aforementioned points, it may be concluded that community health is a problem of both government and citizens. From my perspective, I am of the view that only by taking actions together could public health be improved.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ther could public health be improved.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1768.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 350.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05142857143 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78660938001 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551428571429 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.228829952 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5882352941 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335372149188 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107366772976 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789979060569 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208935219334 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053357097911 0.056905535591 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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