Some people think that school should reward students who show the best academic results while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Whether rewarding student with outstanding marks or those who show improvements is still up for debate. From my point of view, awarding improvements has several beneficial aspects, not only on students but on the society itself. We urgently need a high quality educational system, since it has a crucial role in shaping the destiny of a country.

Rewarding is quite simple. In most of the cases, students with an enviable curriculum get loans, grants, and prizes. There is nothing wrong with it, it is commonplace that takes part in every school. More difficult is to reward students who struggle to reach better results, students who, to some extent, come from poor families, lacking of a cultural background or students who work and study at the same time to make ends meet. Let us put it straight: impressive marks can also be the results of cheating. Impressive improvements is the result of sacrifice and discipline and that should be rewarded. Schools where efforts, commitment, diligence play a major role are more likely to attract engaged students who aim to achieve remarkable goals.

Good marks do not say very much about the abilities of a student. Nowadays, employers are seeking for applicants with skills that cannot be learned at school, like self-assessment, problem solving, awareness, critical thinking. A solid educational system should encourage students to develop those earmarks that require actually discipline and commitment.
In conclusion I would firmly recommend schools to reconsider their rewarding policies and underline the importance of improving themselves. Obtaining excellent marks it is the goal. However, what counts mostly is the way students reach this goal. A way that is often tough, up hill, full of obstacles, and treacherous. As a consequence it is mandatory to reward those who are bale to overcome the obstacles on the road to success,.

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Average: 7.5 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 369, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...equence it is mandatory to reward those who are bale to overcome the obstacles on the r...
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Line 6, column 430, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , .
...ome the obstacles on the road to success,.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, still, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1588.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24092409241 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90549779884 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.63696369637 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 480.6 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.2808455699 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2222222222 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8333333333 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.22222222222 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.329708853096 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0847077713599 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0748855538166 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180268332039 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.074904075402 0.056905535591 132% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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