Some people think that school should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is true that any students showing their outstanding exam results should be rewarded. While I agree that gifts need to be given for the most brilliant children, I believe that ones who make a considerable progress in study also deserve a reward.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why schools should be held accountable for appraising students with best results. One argument is that a reward system is considered as an appraisal to their study and help students become highly competitive to get good grades at school. Another justification is that rewards contribute to finding out the most outstanding children, hence a timely, special attention to develop their abilities. For instance, at my school, there are a study competition among students to reward who has the best scores at exams, therefore, these students will be awarded and sorted into different clubs to expertise in their major and they are the representatives of our school to compete with other schools.
On the other hand, it would be wrong to reject the arguments in favour of giving a reward for students with improvements. Primarily, the gift plays a pivotal role in encouraging students to make great efforts in their study. Studying hard will reap benefits at exam time and a reward is a recognition of a student's hard-working. Without a proper reward compared to gifted students, it will arise their sense of doubt that their hardwork will not pay dividends which leads to the fact that others will have no incentives to learn.
In conclusion, it is ludicrous to compare the rewards for excellent students with the ones for improved students because they are of equal importance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'considerable progress'.
Suggestion: considerable progress
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Suggestion:
...rogress in study also deserve a reward. On the one hand, there are several reaso...
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Suggestion: a student; students
...m time and a reward is a recognition of a students hard-working. Without a proper reward c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03597122302 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81436605308 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.571942446043 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.6421565612 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.272727273 106.682146367 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2727272727 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.27272727273 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276975964837 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113751541661 0.084324248473 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049111608018 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172493602453 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.034781365606 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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