Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate.
Which do you agree with?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
Over the past decades, parts of the conventional teaching has translated into an interaction comprising of entertaining elements in some schools. Alongside this changing pattern in academic domain, the latest sociological discoveries have casted light on the effectiveness and necessities on deploying enjoyable activities in schools. The aim of this essay is set to contend that school should be more entertaining by exploring these benefits to school with supports underpinned by these academic work.
To begin with, school with entertaining curriculum is widely perceived as an distinctive institution. What this means is the practical experience of these entertaining activities, to considerable extent, could intensify the memory of its students. For instance, recent empirical research from the Language of Children Committee ascertained that junior learners who constantly participate in drama invariably outperform their counterparts studying in conventional school in language acquisition. Consistent with this line of thinking, learning centres that integrate its lessons with some entertainment could foster the learning process of its fellow learners in certain disciplines.
Meanwhile, another pivotal benefit for educational institutions to incorporate some entertaining activities in their routine is to reduce the cost for sustaining students’ mental health. This is because these relaxing participations are likely to present an opportunity for students to unwind the strain mainly originated from homework and examinations. In fact, after being interviewed by the Hong Kong University, 70% students admitted that they felt more depressed and stressful prior to taking part in extra-curriculum activities. Seen in this light, these entertainment could constitute a mitigation measure for the academic strain given by the vigorous lifestyle of a typical students.
In conclusion, there is ample evidence suggested that entertaining schools are likely to be more beneficial regarding the reinforced efficiency on cultivation and crucial significance on alleviating academic pressure. Given the strength of this evidence, it is predicted that more educational institutions will contemplate their curriculum in a more entertaining approach after a thorough assessment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'comprising' or 'consisting of'?
Suggestion: comprising; consisting of
...hing has translated into an interaction comprising of entertaining elements in some schools. ...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ining curriculum is widely perceived as an distinctive institution. What this mean...
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Message: Did you mean 'this entertainment' or 'these entertainments'?
Suggestion: this entertainment; these entertainments
...riculum activities. Seen in this light, these entertainment could constitute a mitigation measure f...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'student'?
Suggestion: student
... by the vigorous lifestyle of a typical students. In conclusion, there is ample evide...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, regarding, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1974.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 322.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 6.13043478261 5.12529762239 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.39034295749 2.80592935109 121% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596273291925 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 612.9 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2263609953 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.846153846 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7692307692 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117533840188 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0448625573887 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369363959752 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0785659753284 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246155011818 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 13.0946893788 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 21.74 50.2224549098 43% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 11.3001002004 143% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.57 12.4159519038 150% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.76 8.58950901804 125% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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