Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate. Which do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
There is no doubt that a good education system is a back bone of a strong successful society. While some individual believe that, schools should have more fun element to it, others argue that the main aim of school is providing education only. In my opinion, I do not completely agree with it and believe that schools should not only educate but also play a part in child’s overall development.
On the one hand, our education system only concentrates on studies and administer it maximum priority this is because, the students should be focused and oriented towards academics, which will lead them to a path of success. For example, it was observed that there were some schools in UK that prepared students for competitive exams along with daily studies, hence providing better outcomes. In contrast, if students only study with no mental relaxation, life would become monotonous for them. As a result, they would not perform according to their caliber in exams and in life.
On the other hand, schools should include extra-curricular activities like debate, sports day and concerts to enhance the development of a child. The reason is that, it would help a student to understand his likeness, which may motivate him/her in future to make it as a carrier. For instance, in my opinion, I gained a lot of confidence and improved my verbal skills by participating in debates. This helped me in my profession as well as, to get a desired job. In contrast, children may detter from studies due to their over enthusiastic involvement in these activities. As a result, academically their performance would deteriorate, thus leading to problem in choosing a desired job. Therefore, I believe it depends on maturity and will power of student not to indulge too much in these activities and pay attention to studies.
In conclusion, while school must focus on studies more as it is important for career, I believe for an all round development of a child exposure to such extra-curricular activities play an equally important role.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in contrast, no doubt, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 24.0651302605 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99410029499 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95277731108 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569321533923 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8664074642 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.866666667 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.2 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147418983975 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0452923841753 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0439582677864 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0889632667486 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455744455058 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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