Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People are split as to whether schools ought to reward the best educational pupil or the most progressing one. In my opinion, I passionately believe that recognizing a learner for their outstanding results have more significance, not only for the receipts but other students.
In the first place, it is essential to credit students who proved their improvements. Obviously, it not easy to obtain a good scholastic achievement, because studying tax our physically, mentally and emotionally as well. Thus, improving students must have experienced a scholastic period and even won over several seduces to get better. However, in some situations, rewarding the most improving students brings negative effects to average ones. For instance, some would rise a question about why they have also a better results, make a lot of endeavors but receive nothing from the school.

On the other hand, the best learners completely deserve a for effort for various reasons. Firstly, in order get a high academic accomplishment, even if they are quick learners, they have to crack a book everyday and even become bookworms, in return sacrificing their free-time. Secondly, compensating good students would encourage other average ones to study harder in order to get on honor list. Eventually, while all students are eager to learn more and harder, the quality of school would be improved markedly.
In short, although both the best learners and the most improving ones deserve a reward for their efforts in studying, recognizing the best ones would make better effects on all students.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
People are split as to whether schools ought to reward the best educat...
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Line 4, column 204, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...ick learners, they have to crack a book everyday and even become bookworms, in return sa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, in short, in my opinion, in the first place, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1326.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2828685259 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88710231135 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605577689243 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.8518348887 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9166666667 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.6666666667 7.06120827912 194% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217973941994 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0808209010831 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488953498042 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128946435939 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0292865083203 0.056905535591 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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