Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is a well-established fact that there are various ways of upbringing the children. Some people say children should be raised up with a competitive spirit while the others argue that the fondness of group-working can help them grow up to be fully functioning adults, whom will be able to contribute to the society. In my opinion, these two views are not contradictory and both are required traits of a child.
On one hand, a kid who loves to compete can be self-motivated to put a tremendous amount of effort for the purpose of achieving the highest prize and praises from parents, friends, teachers, etc., thus hones personal skills and intellect. Furthermore, even when they have failed clearly, some of these kids who are strong-willed will just look for any other means that ensure they will not repeat previous mistakes and never fail again. Those aforementioned characters are undeniably important in a highly competitive world which is full of cutthroat businesses and may grant them a successful career and an affluent life. But the passion for the contest must also come with a sense of fairness and self-control. Without these characters, these youngsters, in order to defeat other competitors, regardless of the cost, may resort to immoral methods such as cheating or pulling others down. In short, parents better encourage positive competition among children and teach them to where to draw the line.
On the other hand, because human always lives as groups, not as unrelated individuals, collaboration has been always much more beneficial than being a lone wolf in most situations. If a child is taught to be a team player at early ages, when grow up, he or she can be quite efficient at team work and learn how to respect others' opinions. Additionally, it is also the key for them to develop crucial interpersonal skills which play an indispensable role in their study and prospective's job. For example, a number of large enterprises nowadays ask for candidates with the ability of actively collaborating with colleagues and the superiors. Yet a little ambition and eagerness for competition could be useful for these team players by driving themselves to become a notable member of a team and never be made redundant.
My conclusion is that both cooperation and competitiveness are essential parts for children in their own place. The parents ought to foster those characters and other essential ones as well in their children to make sure that they can contribute to the society when reach the majority.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, may, so, thus, well, while, for example, in short, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 419.0 315.596192385 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04295942721 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98402282256 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 176.041082164 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601431980907 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.1098806521 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.0625 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1875 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.875 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251516263934 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732050719288 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0496301022107 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152972409415 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0545790946057 0.056905535591 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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