It is socially believed that for children to excell they should have competitors; therefore, it is encouraged to do so. On the other hand, others feels that allowing children to compete will result in behavioural drawbacks later in life, whereas obedience should be emphasised. This essay will discuss the benefits of competition as a form of motivation and highlight relevant scenarios.
Firstly, life has its setbacks. Resilience is one of the optimum thing that we should encourage our children to possess for them to achieve greatness. For example, when I was part of school quiz club we lost the show on the first round then the quiz master encourage us to read and practise to fight our competitors. That encouragement to compete gave us strenght to research more and on the next competition our team won resoundingly.
Secondly, peer pressure affect children. It is useful if its positive. For example, a group of well behaved children can teamup and encourage one bad egg to reform and do good for the sake of positive complements others are getting, as the child will be fighting to be a good child and to be praised above others.
Furthermore, Maslow's hierachy of needs is also another form of competition, as one strive to go the next level, therefore hardwork is evitable to greatness. For example a child can workhard during exams to be the best student at the end of the term as it produces self gratification and recognition by the society.
Despite, the positives that competion brings in child's life, if its over emphasised it can develop into Idi personality disorder. It can lead to notorius adults who can do anything just to be on top for the sake of competion. For instance, I was talking to a robber whom I came across; asking him how he came to be a robber and was shocked by his answer as he told me that he wanted to accumulate wealth and be rich like founder of Econet in Zimbabwe.
In my own opinion, I believe a sense of competition should be instilled in our children but not over emphasised. It produces positive results and desireable behaviours and few drawbacks. It was through competition that everyone in our school days aimed for top positions in class to have self gratification and be parents' most lovable child.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, whereas, for example, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1877.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 390.0 315.596192385 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81282051282 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85765866012 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551282051282 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.141609885 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.277777778 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27777777778 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.188953973623 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0646315613264 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0691718908854 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102375105947 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638927890616 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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