Some people think that students who don’t take a break in studies between the high school and the university are at disadvantage compared to students who travel and work after high school before further continuing their education. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, in our competitive world, to succeed, knowledge from school and university is not enough. Therefore, students who study from the school to university get fewer benefits and contribute less too, compared to those student who travel or work and get experience and skills before going high. There are two following reasons to support for my opinion. I refer to the group of people who study from school to university as ‘group A’ and the other group – as ‘group B’.
Firstly, at school and university, what group A gains is almost entirely theory, theory and theory. Of course, theory is very neccessary, however, you can’t do everything with just theory. You must have praticeable experience. This is what group A lack very much. Although in the third or fourth year at university, group A can be apprentices in some companies, to help them approach their future jobs, they aren’t trained well because of the short time spent working. And the real job is still very strange to them. After graduating, without experience, group A students can’t accomplish their work perfectly. On the other hand, it takes them time and money to keep up with other experienced students and they may be scorned. Therefore, group A students can contribute less than group B who have the two most important things: skills and experience.
Secondly, as group A students are contributing less, they surely get less benefit. Moreover, many companies which employ people in group A have to train them from ground-up. These companies take this cost from group A’s salary to reduce the risk of their employees leaving to other companies after being trained. So, less benefits are unavoidable and certain, Whereas group B members are more loyal and effective workers. They also have useful experience and skills. Besides, their education is the same as or even higher than that of group A. As the result, group B gets more benefits absolutely.
In conclusion, I think a student should travel or work before going to the university. That way, not only will they have basic knowledge but also skills and experience which are useful for them to get a good job and have a brilliant future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'this student' or 'those students'?
Suggestion: this student; those students
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A gain' or simply 'gains'?
Suggestion: A gain; Gains
...y, at school and university, what group A gains is almost entirely theory, theory and t...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: A student; Students
...r graduating, without experience, group A students can't accomplish their work perfec...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: A student; Students
...d they may be scorned. Therefore, group A students can contribute less than group B who ha...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A student' or simply 'students'?
Suggestion: A student; Students
...s and experience. Secondly, as group A students are contributing less, they surely get ...
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Line 4, column 323, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun benefits is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...ther companies after being trained. So, less benefits are unavoidable and certain, W...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, third, well, whereas, i think, in conclusion, of course, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1849.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 366.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05191256831 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69728597075 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524590163934 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3954659013 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.0454545455 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6363636364 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245571307301 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686416094974 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827482459516 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159012911809 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103423033347 0.056905535591 182% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.