Some people think that studying in a college or a university is the best way for students to prepare for their future career. However, others think they should leave school as soon as possible to develop their career through work experience. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Whether or not students should continue their studies in university has been a hot topic recently. It is argued that pupils had better take a job immediately after graduating from high school. To a certain extent, I think that having a career brings people some advantages. However, I also believe that it is beneficial for students to go on their study path.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why pupils prefer choosing a job than going to the university. First and foremost, people can earn money from their jobs at an early age. It is clear that jobs can bring people money to deal with their problems in life, especially for those having a financial burden or playing a pivotal role in earning money in their family. Another compelling reason is that there is a tendency for people to have more experience if they get jobs right after high school. After a period of time, individuals may get accustomed to their responsibility, and they may have a greater career progression.
On the other hand, I advocate for those who believe that pupils should pursue their studies. It is widely believed that a university is an excellent environment for people to join a variety of beneficial activities. Students, for example, can participate in some clubs such as dancing and singing as well as some voluntary projects held by the college. As a result, they are likely to have opportunities to explore themselves, develop social skills, and make more new friends. The next primary rationale is that educational institutions can provide students with qualifications and diplomas if they learn well, which is extremely useful for their future professions. It can be explained by the fact that many big companies require high degrees for their vacancies, and people having better qualifications may have greater opportunities for the promotion ladder.
In conclusion, the current trend of getting jobs early is progressively increasing. Although both sides are justifiable, I strongly reckon that continuing education path is better for pupils because of its opportunity to make new friends and high qualifications for a good future job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'Whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: Whether
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Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, so, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 352.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09090909091 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91662731182 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551136363636 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 565.2 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.898955731 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.411764706 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7058823529 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58823529412 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319016478666 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103725127751 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0584132057358 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196515721148 0.151304729494 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0762498115749 0.056905535591 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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