There are a lot of factors that are related to success. Some people believe that people's look and wealth are essential factors that can lead to success, but I hold the view that people make achivements due to their efforts and determination.
Some people think those who are deligent and can keep struggling for their targets can success, due to the fact that these people are more likely to cope with difficulties that appear on their way to achievements. Before acheving the target, it is undoubtely that people may face massive problems. By working hard, they are well-prepared for these obstacles. In addition, they are also more likely to insist because of their determination. In contrast, not every problem can be stressed by money and appearance, without these necessary qualities, any other extra conditions don't work.
However, there are also some other people who perceive that one's look and wealth are more significant for success. The majority of people may need others' help to some extent before they make achivements. Those who are rich or good-look are more likely to get access to other people and they also have more friends. With other people's help they can know more experience or can even make use of other people's efforts and resources. Thus, the rich or beautiful people are not necessarily to be hard-working themselves, and can gain success more efficiently and effectively.
In my view, hard-working people's capacity are better, so that they finally gain the best results. People who are hard-working and determined spend much time on practice and self-development. Therefore, they can develope practical skills and knowledge that are foundamental for their success. For example, a successful drawer needs to try a large number of times in order to be more experienced and paint a well-known painting at last. But that cannot be obtained simply by utilising money and appearance.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 25, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...termination. Some people think those who are deligent and can keep struggling for th...
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Line 3, column 575, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...y qualities, any other extra conditions dont work. However, there are also some o...
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Line 7, column 339, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ample, a successful drawer needs to try a large number of times in order to be more experienced a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, in addition, in contrast, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1603.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13782051282 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84870633696 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512820512821 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4749684796 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2941176471 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3529411765 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05882352941 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271705102719 0.244688304435 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944739883852 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436128412292 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174483694242 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373395783183 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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