Education plays a vital thing during students’ learning periods. Some people think it is a good way for teachers to teaching students the right-and-wrong judgments and good manners, while others argue that teachers should only focus on teaching academic-related knowledge. As for me, I believe it is necessary for teachers to shape not only academic study but also other aspects of students’ development.
First of all, since teachers are care about students’ future, it can make students have a better future by teaching academic things as well as socialization knowledge. Take me for example; when I studied in junior high school, my math teacher, Julia, taught me how to distinguish the right things and the wrong things. With integrity continuous possession, I always chose to do the right things in my job works, making my supervisor so impressed that he offered me an unprecedented promotion. Furthermore, I was entitled to the most integrity and compliance workers in my company. Therefore, learning the right-and-wrong judgment really from Julia really shaped me into an integrity person with decent future development.
Secondly, students are easy to obey teachers, so it is an opportunity for teachers to shape the students’ different aspects of behavior such as right-and-wrong distinction and manner development. For example, my high school teacher, Mike, was a strict mentor. He always forced us to obey not only studying hard but also being polite to people and other socialization manners. If one did not perform well, he would strictly punish him or her, making all my classmates and I did our best to learn and showed good manners. At the end of the semester, we all learned how to performed to be a good manner person. Additionally, my class even won the best polite class of the school. Thus, obeying Mike’s strict rules really shaped me and my classmates into polite and well-mannered students.
Thirdly, if teachers teach only academic subjects, students may think the grades and academic performance is the only goal in their life, thereby misleading them to abandon their social skill development. For instance, when my brother, Timmy, studied in high school, his teacher wash brained him that the grades were the only things worth pursuing in his life. By learning this thought, Timmy stopped joining social activities, teaming up with friends on presentations, and even communicating with people. Instead, he enclosed himself in his bedroom to study to make sure he performed well on each of the school exams. However, even though he graduated from the National Taiwan University, he had a hard time finding a suitable job due to his poor social abilities. Neither could he build a social connection with others nor could he collaborate with his colleagues. Hence, Timmy’s teacher really misled him into the wrong concept of success.
In conclusion, I hold the profound conviction that teachers should teach students distinctive aspects of their behaviors. After all, not only can this approach allow students to have a better future but it can also easily shape students’ social behaviors.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, after all, as for, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 24.0651302605 241% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2638.0 1615.20841683 163% => OK
No of words: 504.0 315.596192385 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23412698413 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73813722054 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95446834811 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 176.041082164 147% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511904761905 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 780.3 506.74238477 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.10420841683 428% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7814252988 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.916666667 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41666666667 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290411559559 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868361164876 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0955322866956 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19277531193 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0973036814466 0.056905535591 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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