Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

people argue in terms of women participation in military services such as infantry, navy and air force. many people consider that females should be forbidden to join as a soldier, while, others believe that female had free rein to enlist in any kind of military services just like men. I partially agree with the statements with the reason I outline below.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why the female is a good candidate to serve in active duty in the military services. First of all, not all women have a poor physical ability since many of them participate in vigorous physical training, making them a suitable candidate for the soldier in any branches of the army. Furthermore, it is proven that women have excellent skill in several areas in army duties such as managing logistic distributions and financial skill. this brings out benefits to the army institutions as they have additional competent soldiers possessing a wide range of skills.

On the other hand, various considerations ought to be taken into account regarding female serve in military services. Firstly, at a certain period of life, women require maternity leave. This will be a drawback for the nations if they have a large number of female enlisting as a soldier because this leave will significantly cut the number of army troop. Secondly, many female soldier experience sexual assault either by their fellow male soldiers or their commanders. Research in female soldier of USA found that 4 of 10 of them experienced sexual harassment during their services in the military. this leads to several health issues such as post-traumatic disorder and depression, and result in the early leave of female as active-duty soldiers.

In conclusion, although there are a few issues should be considered regarding women taking part in any branches of military services, I acknowledge that female soldiers have equal skills with the male counterpart regarding their duty as soldiers.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, in conclusion, kind of, such as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1654.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15264797508 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79853445766 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554517133956 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4068630568 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.142857143 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9285714286 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1428571429 7.06120827912 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11676887411 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0417322818963 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0532220122207 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0881904430846 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0797627206972 0.056905535591 140% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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