Some people think young people should be free to choose his or her job, but other people think they should be realistic and think more about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Young people nowadays face two choices when they search for jobs in the job markets. It is true that most people are likely to work in fields that they like, but I would argue that more realistic work that are related people’s living standards and the quality of their lives can be the first choice.
Many people are advocates of choosing job more freely, mainly because they want to do some work that they are interested in and the work efficiency can be assured. There is an old saying that Interest is the best teacher and people who are happy to devote their time and energy to their favourite jobs can not only obtain wage but also enjoy pleasant time. As an example, young people have been fond of doing sports since they were children, they can work as gym coach in a gym and guide other people to do exercises when they work in their favourite fields. As a consequence, they will have a great time every day and work efficiency can also be high, also they can get a sense of achievement easily.
Other people believe that doing some more realistic work are more important, due to the fact that these realistic work are connected high salary and the future life quality. For example, people can find a job in some technology giant companies such as google, apple and Huawei, which means that their salary will be much bigger that people who are working in other fields. As a result, these people can live better lives in comparison to people who get low salary. Although these young people are unlikely to have a more free style work lives, they can still earn much money to improve their standards of living.
In my opinion, young people should consider the realistic job firstly, because, in this day and age, we need money to maintain our life. Soaring food and energy prices make people hard to make ends meet. If we can work in some companies where they can get high-paying jobs, these young people can save more money for their future in spite of paying high cost of living. Consequently, they can use their wage to do things what they want in the later.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 39, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to job'
Suggestion: to job
... Many people are advocates of choosing job more freely, mainly because they want t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, if, so, still, for example, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in spite of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1704.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 374.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55614973262 5.12529762239 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3976220399 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.18101196177 2.80592935109 78% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475935828877 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.1201726972 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.714285714 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7142857143 20.7667163134 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.21428571429 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310023407491 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136469915895 0.084324248473 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477750090056 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226589612635 0.151304729494 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0258795232745 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 12.4159519038 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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