Some people think young people should be free to choose their jobs, but other people think they should be realistic and think more about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.
Whether young generations should be provided free access to jobs that they might prefer appears to be an intriguing topic in today’s world. Some people convince that they could have to freedom of picking any job in any field, while other keep an opposite view that they are supposed to take reality and future life into account.
Advocates might believe that the young should be allowed to choose jobs freely for their better future. Young people have lots of time spent on deciding what kind of job they would be doing in the future, thus they should not be restricted to choose from such a extensive range of employment opportunities. By exploring specific fields of employment, they could be able to find what interest them most to start a job. Knowing what suits they best would also encourage them to pursue their career, which would build their sense of self-confidence and independence. The trail and error of searching a job they like would also teach them how to face frustration and failure in the future, helping them accumulating experience before working.
However, other people may think that the majority young graduate should have a long-term insight in terms of choosing a job, which would have influential impact on the rest of their life. Normally young graduates would be seemed to be consider a job cautiously and appropriately since their undeveloped maturity, although their passion and bravery could be encouraged. They should focus more on realistic base, which could at least make it possible to scrape a living in society. Only when having enough salaries could they sustain a normal life and feed their future families
In my view, my conviction is that considering realistic conditions never means that youngsters should abandon their aspirations of jobs, but what they could do is balance these two to ensure their quality of daily life. They could try to advance their self-capacities and compulsory skills that their ideal jobs might need before turning to it in the future.
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Suggestion: to accumulate; accumulate
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, thus, while, at least, kind of, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 7.85571142285 306% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 334.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06886227545 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63038734295 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568862275449 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.8308283905 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.083333333 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8333333333 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364388654493 0.244688304435 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139947749247 0.084324248473 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0632763079984 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223181132941 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414947620076 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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