Some people argue that it is pointless to pay entertainers too much, such as singers or sportsmen. I do agree that this group of people earn much more than workers from other domains, and I believe that jobs considering social benefits and technological skills should always be given higher salary.
It is true that many celebrities could earn a larger quantity of fortune, like singers, actors, athletes etc, compared to normal people working in other areas, such as policemen, teachers and so forth. Many entertainers may invest endless time and energy on their acting or sporting careers, gaining their awards with extremely hard working that we could hardly see. In this case, it seems reasonable for them to get a high wage. However, some entertainers earn their wealth and fame for their personal lifestyles instead of their achievements. Then an imbalanced distribution would would be caused. What is worse, people in other important domains might end up getting mismatchedly paid for their work. Practitioners like scientists and biologists may not be treated nicely enough for they have contributed. It would be unfair and ridiculous to see these scholars getting little money to live than those who dominate the entertainment world.
I convince that areas that entail our future developments and technology research should be highly paid, such as medication and treatments, application of nanotechnology, sociology and so on. Since we are becoming more dependent on technological aids in real life, it is necessary to enable these specialists to carry out research with enough funds to explore an unknown world and find incredible results that can be applied in human future. Apart from that, jobs that would bring out unexpected risks should also be paid more, such as flight attendants, firefighters and anti-drug policemen. Unlike the work in entertainment industry, these people may face a huge challenge of losing their lives under emergent conditions, so they would be definitely worth taking much more salaries as rewards. Besides, some of them would even hardly to meet their family yearly as they have to serve the public and have no time to care about their closest relatives.
For above reasons, I completely agree that entertainers do earn much more salaries than those who work in other crucial areas, and I believe that domains that require skilled work and have dangerous preconditions should be paid highly since workers may probably die for their jobs.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 578, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: would
...ements. Then an imbalanced distribution would would be caused. What is worse, people in oth...
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Line 3, column 944, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e who dominate the entertainment world. I convince that areas that entail our fu...
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Line 5, column 825, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'hardly' is usually put before the verb 'even'.
Suggestion: hardly even
...as rewards. Besides, some of them would even hardly to meet their family yearly as they hav...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, may, so, then, apart from, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 24.0651302605 199% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 400.0 315.596192385 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2225 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7884482692 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5775 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 636.3 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.2105484926 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.5625 106.682146367 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.9375 7.06120827912 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250946501759 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855388844741 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061624242795 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179011932848 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493565729188 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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