Some people think young people should be free to choose his or her job,but other people think they should be realistic and think more about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is argued that whether young people should choose jobs freely that they like. While there are some benefits of free choice of work, I do believe that realistic factors should be considered.

Some advocates believe that the young should be allowed to choose jobs based on their preferences since working in favourite sectors would highly motivate them to work, which would be a guarantee to accelerate their effectiveness. For example, those who are working in a field that they quite fancy would be more likely to spend time and devote themselves into their position than people who are just forced to serve a company they do not like at all. As a result, workers who spend longer hours on their work would probably achieve more than those who feel less stimulated.

However, others keep a different voice that young graduates should focus more on practical factors when finding a job. One reason might be that monetary and economical elements both have strong effects on finding a job, and youngsters should consider that whether the job could provide them abundant fortune to deal with their personal life. For instance, the young working as a singer or dancer in a pub mean to pursue their aspirations of performance, but obviously it would hardly get them stably salaried even sustain a every-day needs of consumption.

In my view, young people are supposed make decisions with deliberation, since well paid jobs would basically ensure their quality of life, while interests sometimes would not even bring them a livable house or a tasty meal. A good example would be that a large number of young people have moved to Beijing city to pursue their careers these years, struggling in seeking for a job to feed themselves. And most of them failed and ended up turning back to their homes as they failed to gain a position in such a incredibly competitive market. Thus, the reality should be regarded as an important precondition of finding employment.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, thus, well, while, for example, for instance, as a result, in my view

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 7.85571142285 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1634.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93655589124 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54963416 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.580060422961 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.4859216378 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.166666667 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5833333333 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58333333333 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291732968371 0.244688304435 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119199380471 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661082766982 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.204726897545 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634811386186 0.056905535591 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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