Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However,other people think that zoos are useful to protect the rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In the salad days of the millennium, the society is polarized into two groups almost equally.Regarding

the notion that, whether the zoos should be closed due to its intensive cruel or we should open widely in

order to protect rare animals. However, different people have their distinct mindset. In my opinion, we

should retain zoos to protect limited animals from their extinction. The following paragraphs would shed

light on both the approaches before making a final note.

To commence with the first notion, there are myriad things to share in its favor. It is understandable

that caging animal in the zoo is brutal and so it should be abandoned for some reasons. Keeping animals in

captivity is unethical. Regard to that human is a dominating kind on the planet, but we have no right to

use animals for entertainment. Moreover, wildlife parks exhibit animals with the aim of making profit.

Therefore, It turns out that such animals will be caged underprivileged conditions, for the long-term,

they will lose their instinct to hunt food or even died. According to some report, there was a polar bear

called "Winter" died in the zoo in Buenos Aires in 2012 because of the harsh temperature.

Shifting towards the second school of thought, there are still positive impacts within protect endangered

species. Zoos are an artificial environment that has been made by people form wild animals, especially for

those who are on the brink of disappear such as pandas or rhinos. This allows scientists to study animal

behavior. Another consideration of zoos is that they employ a large number of people, thus providing job

opportunities and income for local residents.

In conclusion, We cannot deny that both sides are well-grounded. Although zoo plays an important role in

wildlife conservation, I would argue that government should take serious steps in order to give more

realistic living environment compared with their natural environment.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, still, therefore, thus, well, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1713.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40378548896 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90073683728 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.643533123028 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.3228072243 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1666666667 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6111111111 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94444444444 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 4.38176352705 456% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 29.0 5.01903807615 578% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255050952216 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660461784203 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699707796502 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0626738143777 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0654013140294 0.056905535591 115% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.74 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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