Some people today believe that it is acceptable to use physical force to discipline children but others feel it is completely unacceptable

Essay topics:

Some people today believe that it is acceptable to use physical force to discipline children, but others feel it is completely unacceptable.

Discipline is the most important part of children's life and some folks say that it is good if elders use physical force to discipline children also few residents feel that method is not completely unacceptable. I delineate my justification to describe both of the prospective in upcoming fragment before reaching at logical conclusion.

To begin with, children have very low IQ level and they do not think before do something but sometimes they done wrong things that is not good for them and society that is why people believe that if teenagers done any wrong thing then their parents and teachers should punish them by physical force life, beat children and give them difficult tasks that children done by physical.

Although some people say that it is good to punish children by physical force there is some folks which they do not believe in these things. Firstly, if we beat children then they take these things in negative way and after that they can do wrong things which is not good for their future. Secondly, children 's body is not that much strong if somebody give them physical task so their body can injure.

To sum up, on the basis of my above mentioned analysis and explanation. Personally, I believe that people should give punishment to children according to their wrong task and that also should teach them how can we live in discipline.

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Average: 6.6 (14 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...to their wrong task and that also should teach them how can we live in discipline...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1131.0 1615.20841683 70% => OK
No of words: 234.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83333333333 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51990758834 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 176.041082164 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517094017094 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 345.6 506.74238477 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.220145567 49.4020404114 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.375 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.25 20.7667163134 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.375 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261966204404 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119144792871 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123411404397 0.0667982634062 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164436810109 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733603940569 0.056905535591 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 78.4519038076 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t logical conclusion. To begin with, children have very low IQ level and they...
^^
Line 3, column 294, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... teachers should punish them by physical force life, beat children and give them...
^^
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uld punish them by physical force life, beat children and give them difficult t...
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Line 3, column 346, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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..., beat children and give them difficult tasks that children done by physical. ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...sks that children done by physical. Although some people say that it is good to puni...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 79, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are some folks'?
Suggestion: there are some folks
...od to punish children by physical force there is some folks which they do not believe in these thi...
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...ce there is some folks which they do not believe in these things. Firstly, if we...
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Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...o not believe in these things. Firstly, if we beat children then they take these...
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Line 5, column 302, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... is not good for their future. Secondly, children s body is not that much strong...
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Line 5, column 336, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ondly, children s body is not that much strong if somebody give them physical ta...
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Line 5, column 357, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'somebody' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gives'.
Suggestion: gives
...dy is not that much strong if somebody give them physical task so their body can in...
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Line 7, column 11, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... so their body can injure. To sum up, on the basis of my above mentioned analy...
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Line 7, column 130, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lieve that people should give punishment to children according to their wrong ta...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ople should give punishment to children according to their wrong task and that a...
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Line 7, column 195, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to their wrong task and that also should teach them how can we live in discipline...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1131.0 1615.20841683 70% => OK
No of words: 234.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83333333333 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91114542567 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51990758834 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 176.041082164 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.517094017094 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 345.6 506.74238477 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.220145567 49.4020404114 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.375 106.682146367 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.25 20.7667163134 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.375 7.06120827912 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261966204404 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119144792871 0.084324248473 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123411404397 0.0667982634062 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164436810109 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0733603940569 0.056905535591 129% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 50.2224549098 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 37.0 78.4519038076 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.