Some say that dangerous sports should be banned by governments while others think that the freedom of people to choose their sport must be respected.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
These days, extreme sports that could often lead to threatening one’s life are being patronized, regardless of the participant’s purpose. It is being argued by some that since dangerous sports could cause severe injuries, the government should then do the efforts to subject it in prohibition. Others, however, claim that it is an individual’s free will to choose upon what kind of sports despite its extremity, they should engage themselves with. Having that said, this essay aims to discuss both sides of the arguments.
On one hand, in relation to the evolving social relationships in this modern world, satisfaction from challenging activities as extreme sports has become a common trend. Extreme sports that involve physical contact such as rugby, football or boxing tend to be an interesting sport to any age group. As these kinds of sports are being performed with a lot of physical contacts, it is by no means certain that serious physical injuries as head concussions and fractures could not be avoided by playing these games. These kinds of injuries, depending on severity could possibly change a person’s life as it could make one’s body seriously injured, paralyzed, comatose, and even worst, get killed. Having said the risks, the government is expected to put these games in prohibition.
On the other hand, living in a world where everybody has the right to choose, it is an individual’s preference and will to choose which kind of sports they should join. Regardless of the purpose, a person’s time, commitment, and dedication to attend training are required to succeed in these games. To gain physical and personal improvement, discipline is being developed and showcased. Nevertheless, though these sports are life-threatening, self-discipline is being enhanced at the same time, therefore, also preparing an individual to face even harder struggles in life.
Having mentioned both sides, it is undeniably true that extreme sports are both life-threatening and life succeeding. With that in mind, in my perspective, the government should not prohibit people to join some dangerous sports, however, safety measures should be applied. For example, a “physically fit to join” medical certificate should be required. In line with that, a person should undergo a thorough medical assessment from a certified physician first, before they could be allowed to join the team, this ensures that they are physically healthy for a strenuous activity. In addition, the compulsory use of protective safety sports gears should be imposed, thus, “no protective gears, no play” rule should be applied. Football helmets, knee and shoulder pads, mouth guards and the like protective sports gears should be readily available to be used by every player.
In conclusion, any extreme activities as dangerous sports could lead people to danger, but that is not a reason for these sports to be prohibited, therefore, safety measures are to be applied, to prevent, or at least minimize injuries that these sports could cause its joiners.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...easures should be applied. For example, a 'physically fit to join' medi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, thus, at least, for example, in addition, in conclusion, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 13.1623246493 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 7.85571142285 255% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2616.0 1615.20841683 162% => OK
No of words: 483.0 315.596192385 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41614906832 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68799114503 4.20363070211 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09800730594 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 176.041082164 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517598343685 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 793.8 506.74238477 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6361511401 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.8 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.15 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299989457928 0.244688304435 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104224433527 0.084324248473 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648522992078 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194762114863 0.151304729494 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0529204563218 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.45 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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