Some systems require students to specialize in a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. Other systems require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of these two education systems and which is better?
It is indisputable fact that education performs a significant role in humans life all over the world, and some systems demand students who became fifteen years old to specialize in a limited range of subjects whilst the opponents require studying a wide range of subjects until they leave school. However, despite there are plethora of merits of these two systems, I highly prefer to learn a wide range of subjects and express my notion in the following paragraphs with prime examples, before a reasoned conclusion.
On the one side, it is undeniable that some students consider studying a limited set of sciences which are extremely essential for them during their lifespan. Mainly because they think that other subjects distract them while they are preparing for the exams, and some of them have not any curiosity towards the other sciences. For instance, it is irrefutable that the diminutive percentage of students learn a limited range of subjects. The first benefit of this system is it is easier and more accelerated to learn any science that can attract your attention rather than the others. The second advantage is it is preserving the time while pupils are preparing for university or college exams. Therefore, most youngsters select a limited range of sciences which will be necessary for the upcoming future.
On the other side, there are other pupils who want to study a wide range of subjects, and these types of students will be extremely talented. That is because everyone knows that if a person learns a lot of sciences, he or she can achieve success in their bright future and this delivers them a huge amount of money, as well as any prestigious jobs for them after they graduated the university. For example, intelligent and educated employees are very necessary for any organization in order to cross the goal line and enhancing the productivity of work. Furthermore, learning more sciences leads everyone to prosperity, and these kinds of intelligent people are very few, especially, in the present day.
In conclusion, it is evident that the second system outweighed rather than the first one, and more beneficial in comparing to the other methods.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 136, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...world, and some systems demand students who are fifteen years old to specialize in a li...
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Line 1, column 236, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'studying'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: studying
...f subjects whilst the opponents require to study a wide range of subjects until they lea...
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Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: ALSO_OTHER[1]
Message: Use simply 'there are other' or 'there are also'
Suggestion: there are other; there are also
...he upcoming future. On the other side, there are also other pupils who want to study a wide range o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, second, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1685.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 337.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67403343091 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537091988131 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.7708605715 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.416666667 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0833333333 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381621729705 0.244688304435 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12290172053 0.084324248473 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.123625904727 0.0667982634062 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215289544475 0.151304729494 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144718086273 0.056905535591 254% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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