Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Over a decade, a professional athlete has become a prestigious job to earn billion money and other jobs followed in behind. This condition had been justifying by some people was rightful and others it was unjust.
For some people who have come with positive feedback have known that sport is uneasy jobs to deal with. In contrary, the protestants never know that ordinary people never become good athlete without a special ability.
The special talent is never be conducted by learning, it is precious and gifted through the line of blood. On this great condition, becoming sportsman have always appreciated and funded in various ways. So that is no wonder if Indonesian government supports the best Indonesian athletes by 50 billion Rupiah to whom bring the golden medal in a sporting event.
In another side of commentaries, athletic ability is not gifted talent, it can be learned by practice through time. Therefore, sports professions like other professions. To become lecture have already qualified with master qualification and that need seven years period in a study. This length of time has the same period with an immature athlete to become expert one. Therefore, the equal income has to generate to those two different professions.
In my opinion, the truth justice does not always be equal. The fair action can be engaged with taking on something in appropriate place. Therefore, unequal salary within lecture and athlete is fair enough due to acrobatic swimmer can be done by few people and to become lecture can be everybody.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, as to, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1292.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08661417323 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6734573673 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610236220472 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.3209064586 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 86.1333333333 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9333333333 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.6 7.06120827912 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174767803489 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0586213780989 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0546306293443 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100179886446 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592964024585 0.056905535591 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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