Task 2: It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree of disagree?

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Task 2: It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree of disagree?

The investing in healthcare sector acts a hitherto-fundamentalist role in the sustainable development of each country. Many people suppose that the financial investment brings more benefits to the country, by contrast, others suppose the financial assistance on people who are already in disease. In my perspective, the monetary fluxes are being concentrated on upgrading medical infrastructure and caring patients.
In the one hand, I comprehend the reason why preventive resolutions contend many of difficulties. Firstly, in order to intercept disease need to mobilize tremendous capital from society, it is excessively difficult for developing countries. With a requirement of a clean environment in order to prevent illness, it is essential that the country needs an all-encompassing resolution in entire sectors of human life in order to enhance generally environmental quality. It consumes considerably national budget and beyond the ability of the developing countries. Secondly, accompanying with the enhancement of life quality is the contemporaneous enlargement of divergent viruses, and some hitherto-uncontrolled by medicine. With the massive of byzantine transformation, they become a dangerous threatening with society.
In the other hand, centralizing on injecting the money in caring and administrating healthcare policies is more practical and efficient solution. By directly investing in the infrastructure of the hospitals, the patients have the better condition for medical examination. Besides, the encouragement of researching science and educating medical examiner can considerably ameliorate medical examination quality. Furthermore, the capital investments in information technology to administrate the hospitals and foster the productivity, hence healing more people.
In conclusion, owing to the aforementioned arguments, it seems to me that instead of preventing illness, monetarily should be spent on directly investing in people who in diseases.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 24.0651302605 46% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1702.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.14440433213 5.12529762239 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.791414734 2.80592935109 135% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.602888086643 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.0 1.60771543086 124% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9234588808 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.571428571 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7857142857 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0932682691306 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0269117777611 0.084324248473 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332310501003 0.0667982634062 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0563232281405 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.015352343264 0.056905535591 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 18.35 50.2224549098 37% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.33 12.4159519038 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.85 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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