Task 2: Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.
Do you agree or disagree?
There is a controversy of whether or not boosting the price of sweet products could make a reduction in consuming these goods. While I think that many health issues would be caused by this tendency, I disagree that high-priced sugary products could solve the desire of eating this kind of food.
To begin with, nowadays due to overconsuming sweets or sugary goods, children or even adults are prone to a range of severe diseases such as obesity, heart attack, or high blood pressure. This prevents them for having a healthy lifestyle; instead of that, sedentary lifestyle could be built by their consumption habit. In terms of the elderly, these diseases could result in the lower average longevity while the young suffering from obesity could also be affected by terrible comments from surrounding people. For example, a friend of mine underwent mental illnesses, particularly depression and anxious disorder when she got body-shaming from her peers.
On the other hand, I would argue that to reduce the consumption of sugary food, uplifting the cost of these products would be inappropriate. The initial point is that while the commercial breaks of sweet food still popularize everywhere, it would be tough to control the appetite of consumers. This could be seen when children still require and ask constantly their parents to buy Coca Cola for them otherwise they will not have dinner. Furthermore, nowadays, the living standard of ordinary people have increased tremendously because of the development and the higher income among households in our society. As a result, higher price of products no longer becomes a major problem to citizens. This not only cannot mitigate problematic impacts of sugary food, but also emphasize the importance of these kinds of food in daily life.
In conclusion, it is undeniable that sweet food and drink would bring about a big problem to people’s health. However, I believe that the method of making these products expensive is not a good solution.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 27, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
There is a controversy of whether or not boosting the price of sweet products co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, still, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1678.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16307692308 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74916490817 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603076923077 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.6348640924 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.857142857 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2142857143 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0714285714 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19369287852 0.244688304435 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685132131607 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601636158285 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137219556764 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684352725027 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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