Task 2 More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes cars and other items What are the reasons Do you think it is a positive or negative development

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Task 2: More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other items. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Many people are spending money on products of popular brands. The primary reason for this precadiment is that the living standard is rising and I believe this is a negative development because it prevents healthy competition among companies

The underlying cause associated with people wanting to have merchandise of well-known brands is the rising standard of living. That is to say that famous brands' products invariably come with high quality and cost, many people, meanwhile, are earning more with high-paying jobs, so it is understandable that they want to possess luxurious, branded products regardless of the cost as a reward for hard working and life enjoyment. For example, Iphones are globally accepted for its stability thus the price is increasing every year, however it is being bought growingly predominantly because many people are wealthier.

This predicament will produce an unhealthy competition among corporations. To be more specific, the tendency of buying items of popular brands will lead to an unreasonably higher price of those products because of the rising demand. At the same time, it diminishes the appeal of other products, leaving smaller companies and startups harder to make profit thus unable to compete fairly with global corporations . For example, Vsmart used to struggle to sell products in its own country Vietnam because Apple and Samsung already dominated the market share, so it was hard to drive people to buy less-popular products such as Vsmart phones.

In conclusion, famous brand items are being bought increasingly because people are more prosperous and this is a major issue leading to an unhealthy environment for small companies within a country to develop.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... compete fairly with global corporations . For example, Vsmart used to struggle to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1450.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39033457249 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85489015642 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579925650558 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 446.4 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.9079647836 49.4020404114 164% => OK
Chars per sentence: 161.111111111 106.682146367 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8888888889 20.7667163134 144% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190776098211 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757509726902 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604217921789 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12495233349 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364786975069 0.056905535591 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.57 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.7795591182 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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