Technology can bring many benefits. But it can also cause social and environmental problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is widely acknowledged that technological development can bring myriad advantages to people's life. However, the stem of climate change and social issues could be from cutting-edge technology. From my perspective, while social platforms can be disadvantageous, the drawbacks of environmental issues should be taken into consideration.
On the one hand, there are several demerits of the social system, the most significant of which are the youth's lack of interest in studying and causing health problems. With regard to the former, with technological development, the young generation tends to use applications to solve assignments. For example, a juvenile is into solving math or any kind of homework through applications, which saves them time a lot. In terms of the latter, there are different kinds of diseases found in people caused by the extensive use of technology. For instance, nowadays the young generation uses a mobile phone as a matter of course, which damages their eyesight a lot along with other diseases.
On the other hand, environmental problems would be disadvantageous for reasons, associated with air pollution and noise pollution. When it comes to the first idea, Factories and vehicles create a lot of dangerous gases that release the amount of C02 to the environment. For example, HCM city where is the largest vehicle emission of CO2 per year, making the oxygen of the environment more and more alarming. As far as the second point is concerned, there is plenty of technological machines which create sound pollution. For instance, Ha Noi where is considered a concrete jungle city, with many heavy machines and works. Therefore, the inhabitant suffers from many problems such as sleep disruption and lost productivity, etc.
In conclusion, I am inclined to believe that despite the negative implications that social systems can exert, the disadvantages of environmental issues should not be underestimated.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, of course, such as, with regard to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1642.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40131578947 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21294532466 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605263157895 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 24.4280348962 49.4020404114 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 109.466666667 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2666666667 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2666666667 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196133209408 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607934702485 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442386700673 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113859371539 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276686319451 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.04 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.2 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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