The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumer goods. To what extend do you agree?

Essay topics:

The tendency of human beings to copy one another is shown in the popularity of fashion clothes and consumer goods. To what extend do you agree?

Clothes and goods that person allocates has been the expression of particular customer for many years. Nowadays, mankind inclined to catch up with a vogue clothes that have been widespread among their peers. As far as I am concerned, they should wear what they want to and not what other people wear.
A reason which I support this idea is the personal interest of that person. Subsequently, democratic society, which permit us to wear what we want, has been developed in worldwide. Taking a case of Japanese people, they are famous for its unique fashion sense. In addition, they annually organize fashion events which are being celebrated in many countries. Furthermore, cloth is a thing that can represent you in overall, so do not try to imitate others and do not put an effort to glance as others.
However, some might say that what the adolescent should do if they are being bullied or discriminated by their peers because of their unpopular cloth? Although, there are chances that these kind of problem might occur, teenager should change their friendship circle and environment. Moreover, they should choose who can respect their certain fashion sense and people who will not humiliate due to their clothing.
To sum up, people should wear what they really appreciate and not because of the popularity of particular clothes and products. It may seen insurmountable, but if people accomplish what I have mentioned above it is sure thing to overcome.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 185, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
...cloth? Although, there are chances that these kind of problem might occur, teenager should...
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Line 4, column 136, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[3]
Message: Did you mean 'see' or 'be seen'?
Suggestion: see; be seen
...particular clothes and products. It may seen insurmountable, but if people accomplis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, in addition, kind of, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1217.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 243.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00823045267 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68660306604 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61316872428 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 368.1 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 22.4425631124 49.4020404114 45% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.6153846154 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6923076923 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.84615384615 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153312439156 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0543487406482 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040746073879 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949054135326 0.151304729494 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0224598016747 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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