In these days, certain jobs such as medical or education are undervalued and should be paid more. While the others state that film actors or company bosses should be paid with a huge sum of money
it is true that certain jobs such as medical or education are undervalued and should be paid more. While the others state that film actors or company bosses should be paid with a huge sum of money, I would strongly argue that doctors, nurses or teachers should be more valued in the modern society.
First and foremost, teachers should be paid more due to the higher demand of education from people around the world. I believe that education is the only path that leads us to wealth from salary that can be earned from our job. The higher is the level of teaching, the harder the teachers must teach in order to make the students understand fully their lessons. As the teachers work hard, they should deserve a great amount of money due to their contribution to student’s success, which can lead to student’s bright future.
Secondly, doctors and nurses are the most important factor to improve people’s health. being healthy is a dream for everyone in the world and it is being considered as one of the most fundamental keys to build a happy life. if people are not healthy, they cannot enjoy the fullest happiness in the world. Hence, doctors and nurses are responsible in treating diseases as well as preventing it from people. A good illustration for this is in Africa countries, which has frequent diseases occurred, doctors and nurses are extremely in need. As a result, African governments set a high salary with tremendous appreciation for any high-quality doctors as well as nurses who work in developing countries.
In my point of view, to decide the salary of each job, it should be relied on two factors, namely contribution and necessity. Firstly, workers income should depend on their contribution. The more do the field contribute, the more the workers can earn as this benefits the growth of the nations. For instance, in many countries, police officers are highly earned as they help to plunge the criminal rate. Furthermore, the necessity of the job is one of the most crucial factors to decide workers earning. if the job is in need, the governments should rise the worker’s earning in order to attract more workers for that particular field. Studies have shown that as many diseases are popular, salary of a nurse is twice as much as salary of an accountant.
In conclusion, I am convinced that several workers in medical and educational field should be paid higher instead of film actors or company bosses. I believe that to decide workers salary, the contribution and the necessity of the job should be noted.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, as well as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2137.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 435.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91264367816 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73048487058 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487356321839 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.9 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 8.0 2.52805611222 316% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.9520879107 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.761904762 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7142857143 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395827034706 0.244688304435 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11805721271 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165281775628 0.0667982634062 247% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.28254365862 0.151304729494 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.256243307391 0.056905535591 450% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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