These days, a great number of children prefer spending time on computer games rather than on sports. Why it is a positive or negative development?
it is universally acknowledge that thank to the development of the internet, it seem to be more and more entertainment for youngsters like computer games. while some reasons be identified to explain while many children spend the majority of the time playing game online instead of taking part in any sport or exercise. In my opinion this trend brings about disadvantages rather than advantages.
In the first place, there are myriad obvious causes leading to children prefer playing game online to doing exercise. Nowadays, children can find any kind of games in the internet easily. Moreover, computer games is developed and improved both quality and quatity. some of them require players who play constantly to get higher rank and make player feeling eager for success. Another reason why youngsters opt for computer games is the sedentary lifestyle favoured by a large number of youngsters living in big cities. In comparison with sports, games online are less physically demanding and therefore attract lazy and inactive children.
Regarding my perspective, computer games can have myriad detrimental impact on children. In order to get more benefit, some producers can launch several dangerous games without censoring of government. this game usually have violent content in their own. it can interactive behaviour and conduct of children, sometimes makes children thinking negatively. On the other hand, spending too much time playing games makes children lose their attention on their lectures and then decreases their achievement in school. Simultaneously, this can make children more prone to many health problems such as obesity, eye diseases. Besides, children will lack of soft skills like teamwork, communication if they waste their time on computer games.
To recapitulate, children need participate more outdoor activities in order to develop completely. Personally, I am convinced that parents and government should restrict children playing games to ensure the proper development of them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, if, moreover, regarding, so, then, therefore, while, kind of, such as, in my opinion, in the first place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1716.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.57142857143 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84273781587 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.62012987013 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 532.8 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.7061440749 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3333333333 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1111111111 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.288652458237 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876258139857 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0380115449656 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168501805446 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031111040999 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.73 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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