These days many children spend a lot of their time playing computer games but little time doing sports.
Why is this?
Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
In today's modern society, it is evident that there is a declining rate of children of children participating in sports activities, while more and more of them choose to play video games. This essay will discuss several reasons for this phenomenon and will also state why I strongly believe that this situation has many negative outcomes for children and society.
To begin, the first cause is urbanization. The lack of working opportunities in villages have lead the vast majority of the world to abandon them and live in cities. It could be argued that this has benefits, however, traffic, increased criminality, and generally a less safe environment prevents the parents to let their children outside to play sports. Doing sports, from my perspective, is not only being a member of a football or a basketball team for example but also just play with friends during the afternoons. Thus, it is safer, according to their parents to play video games inside a house. Unfortunately, empty stadiums are very common.
Despite these facts, video games have several negative effects on teenagers. Most of these games include violent content which affects their personality and make them more aggressive. Several examples could be given of students entering schools holding guns because they saw it happens in games. Also, according to new researches, nearly 60% of addicted to computer games children may become eventually psychopaths or develop another psychological disorder.
To conclude, the need for money made people live in cities. However, cities are not a great environment to raise a child. Although, all together we have to find solutions and eventually pull out the children from virtual reality, which alters their personality.
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...eality, which alters their personality.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, so, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29136690647 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79047907337 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.629496402878 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2829328235 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0666666667 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5333333333 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 7.06120827912 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239759490405 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599824168619 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058237338484 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124879152126 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558668601437 0.056905535591 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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