“Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that prevalent consumer products with high sales symbolizes the increased development of marketing but many people state that these numbers do not show the real demands of the whole society. From my point of view, a large amount of goods represents the power of trade but people also depend on other factors to purchase the products.
On the one hand, I strongly believe that promoting brand images exerts a vital impact upon facilitating the sales. Firstly, advertising is a key part of modern business. For example, employers persuade buyers into buying their products through a plethora of ways such as: eye-catcher images, special slogans to bring in higher incomes of the company. Moreover, marketing informs people about the choices we have. To illustrate, sweet company will make appealing advertisements about their products to publicize their brand, children in particular
On the other hand, there are also many factors that help customers meet their needs apart from advertising. For instance, people want to buy a new television as it offers them with Internet access to the Internet, a variety of channels related to their favourite hobbies. Furthermore, clothes in famous brands such as Gucci, Chanel, Dior draw people’s attention due to their suitable materials, eternal charming and fashion. People stand higher of purchasing a car because it does not waste electricity and it pollutes less.
In conclusion, I support the view that besides advertising, other features will also play an indispensable role in customers’ decisions to buy products.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, moreover, so, apart from, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1338.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.352 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88194378849 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.676 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8956937299 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.636363636 106.682146367 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7272727273 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.4545454545 7.06120827912 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0843358843654 0.244688304435 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0292023830914 0.084324248473 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037451440577 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0526935758726 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471201278957 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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