In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy.
Some people think that the government should have the responsibility.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In many Western countries, childhood obesity is considered as a typical sign of deteriorating public health. Many people blame this situation on the governments but from my point of view, not only authorities but also parents and children themselves have to combat the childhood obesity crisis.
On the one hand, it cannot be denied that governments’ aim is to guarantee the physical well-beings of the citizenships. Therefore, it means that when they realize any potential problem, they should be the first to put forward measures to take actions. A simple solution would to encourage regular exercise and healthy diets through advertising on social media. However, I doubt they still any further roles to play apart from this methodology.
On the other hand, both parents and youngsters should take on their responsibilities for obesity among teenagers. Children are becoming excess of nutrition due primarily to inappropriate nutrients from their food, which then proves parents’ poor choice of diet for their offspring. In order to mitigate this problem, they should have a tendency of choosing healthy eating patterns that contain less sugar and fat. Moreover, adolescents nowadays are leading a more sedentary lifestyle than in the past. This can be exemplified by the fact that technological advances leads to a higher number of recreational in the leisure time such as video games, social platforms. Thus, they would prefer to stay in their room and glue to screens rather than exercise on a daily basis. In this case, parents have to raise their sons and daughters’ awareness of the hazards involved these electronic devices as well as force them to go outside to do more physical tasks or exercises.
In conclusion, although there are many people argue that governments should have all their responsibilities on controlling overweight and unhealthy children, I personally reckon that both the families and the authorities should try their best to curb the obesity epidemic.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, apart from, as for, in conclusion, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1688.0 1615.20841683 105% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3417721519 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0441656328 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610759493671 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2290671193 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.571428571 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5714285714 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154143377239 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466951234836 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557212641305 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109653559809 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655827738931 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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