In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy.
Some people think that the government should have the responsibility.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
childhood obesity is becoming a serious problem in many nations. many people think that government should be responsible for this, while I personally suppose that parents must be the primary duty on children’s overweight.
There are several reasons why children are getting unbalanced shapes. The first reason is that children are allowing to intake a large amount of unhealthy food on a daily basis. Fast food as an example for containing high amount of fat which can lead to child’s putting-on weight and related diseases. Another reason is that young children often are strongly governed by computer or technology devices. Therefore, they prefer spending hours and hours sticking their eyes on the screens to taking part in outdoor activities. Consequently, the calories they consumed are not burned but internal fat tissue which contributes to obese children.
parents have to take a main responsibility for this negative impact. first, they should control their offspring’s eating habits. Trying to avoid the unhealthy food such as fried, pizza or even cut the extra meals. Additionally, they also can encourage their children to live a dynamic life. Adult need to be a child’s good partner on physical activities, not just tell them verbally. this may help children escape from idle lifestyle.
The government also should take measures to eliminate children’s obesity. Enacting strict legislations that preventing food companies from producing unhealthy convenience food as well as advertising them on mass media would also indirectly keeps children away from high-calorie-contained foods.
In conclusion, although the government should have responsibility for childhood obesity, each parent of every single family still plays the most important role on orienting their offspring to a healthy life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.64620938628 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14677218559 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.653429602888 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 471.6 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.7506499168 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2941176471 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47058823529 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156337259903 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511710056133 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511809544772 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980421193304 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0638023447934 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.19 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.