In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy.
Some people think that the government should have the responsibility.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In several nations , the number of people who have young age are turning out to be obese and ailing . While I agree that the authorities have a duty to have the liability , I believe each citizens need to control their vigor .
On the one hand , I would agree that management should exhibit the responsibility. Firstly , if the government often organises more activities about health awareness education for dwellers, teenager will have a amount of knowledge to know the effects of weight gain . Secondly , the government should be the one to perform inspirational sports play for children and adults . So I doubt the government has any further role to play .
On the other hand , although the liability have the responsibility , teenager who do not want to lose - weight are useless . Everyone needs to be motivated to control their weight and health . And parents are the only ones who can encourage or force the children to do more physical tasks or exercises.
In conclusion, the government should combat health issues as soon as possible. And teenagers need to opt for a healthier lifestyle.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, well, while, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 24.0651302605 33% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 41.998997996 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 916.0 1615.20841683 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 181.0 315.596192385 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06077348066 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.66791821706 4.20363070211 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87467289847 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 176.041082164 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60773480663 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 286.2 506.74238477 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.2274723389 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.2727272727 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4545454545 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.90909090909 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180796967769 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661138200434 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0401139539121 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101119721142 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0335417403018 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 78.4519038076 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.