Today, the high sales of popular goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real need of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Recently, the phenomenon of advertisement’s power and its corresponding impacts have sparked a long-running dispute. In this regard, apart from ever-increasing sales of goods due to enormous advertisements, some people are of the opinion that we shouldn’t lose sight of societies’ true needs. In my mind, skyrocketing the sales of popular items is the manifestation of ads’ power, in terms of ubiquitous and psychological effects.
Obviously, the most impressive aspect of advertising, in today’s modern communities, is its ubiquity. Commercial ads exist wherever you might thick, like TV programs, Internet, social networks, and even in the sky! Consequently, ubiquity of advertisements paves the way to persuade loads of people to purchase commodities, whether they really need those items or not. It brings a significant rise for sales.
What’s more, advertisement companies aim to arouse individuals, particularly adolescence, emotions. Hence, millions of teenagers would feel they need to acquire such items as celebrities my offer them in ads. Meanwhile, according to researchers’ findings, huge amount of international firms’ budget spends on advertising rather than improving the quality of products or R&D and so it is an obvious indicator of their advertising machines’ power all around the four corners of the globe.
On the other hand, opponents claim that nowadays, over-advertising leads to spread of consumerism across the society. Remarkable number of individuals pay their hard-earned money to buy such goods which it is more likely that they don’t read their manuals even once. In addition, being a consumerist put a colossal burden on shoulders of societies as well as family’s expenditures and natural sources.
To sum up, despite compelling arguments about the power of ads, I opt to support vigorously the idea that its strength eventually ends up to promote sales’ figures. Advertising department of firms obey an apparently simple rule: out of sight, out of mind.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, consequently, hence, if, really, so, well, while, apart from, in addition, as well as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32352941176 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17007782171 2.80592935109 113% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.647058823529 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 517.5 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 306.0 20.2975951904 1508% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1629.0 106.682146367 1527% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 306.0 20.7667163134 1474% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 127.0 7.06120827912 1799% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242976376462 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.242976376462 0.084324248473 288% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11659615969 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0440784708397 0.056905535591 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 156.6 13.0946893788 1196% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -247.57 50.2224549098 -493% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 123.8 11.3001002004 1096% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.06 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 23.72 8.58950901804 276% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 66.0 9.78957915832 674% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 124.4 10.1190380762 1229% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 124.0 10.7795591182 1150% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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