Topic : the graph below shows changes in young adults unemployment rates in England between 1993 and 2012
The given line graph illustrates the rate of unemployed young adults from 1993 to 2012, the period of 19 years. Overall, while the percentage of unemployment in people aged 16-24 in London and the rest of England increased, those of 2 other areas witnessed a decrease over the period.
In 1993, the rate of people who unemployed in London of young adults at the age of 16-24 was highest compared to other sections, over 20%. This was higher than the overall unemployment rates in the rest of England with 10%. Apart from a slightly decrease from 1993 to 2002, these figure kept growing and reached the peak at nearly 25% in 2012.
The percentage of people who unemployed in other 3 areas saw a similar trend when showing a downward trend from 1993 to 2004 then in the next period between 2004 and 2012, while the unemployment rate of people who aged 16-24 in the rest of London sharply rose until finished at over 20%, there were steadily rose in those of London city and the rest of England which reached to nearly 10% and over 7% respectively.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 29, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a unemployed'.
Suggestion: who is a unemployed
...he period. In 1993, the rate of people who unemployed in London of young adults at the age of...
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Line 2, column 235, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('decrease') instead of another adjective.
...he rest of England with 10%. Apart from a slightly decrease from 1993 to 2002, these figure kept gr...
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Line 3, column 26, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a unemployed'.
Suggestion: who is a unemployed
... 25% in 2012. The percentage of people who unemployed in other 3 areas saw a similar trend wh...
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Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'risen'.
Suggestion: risen
...nished at over 20%, there were steadily rose in those of London city and the rest of...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
then, while, apart from
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 13.1623246493 23% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 4.0 24.0651302605 17% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 864.0 1615.20841683 53% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 188.0 315.596192385 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59574468085 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 4.20363070211 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41060167856 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 176.041082164 52% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484042553191 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 247.5 506.74238477 49% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 111.046536791 49.4020404114 225% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 144.0 106.682146367 135% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3333333333 20.7667163134 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286098847116 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.164850311265 0.084324248473 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0958066578725 0.0667982634062 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220030040648 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0446761774208 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.39 50.2224549098 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 11.3001002004 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.99 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 31.0 78.4519038076 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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