Topic: In some countries, it is illegal if employers reject someone because of his or her age. Do you think this is a negative or positive development?
In some developed and democratic countries, there are already laws to criminalize the practice of rejecting job applicants based on their age. Although in some cases, this serves to marginalize and punish those committing discriminatory acts, for the most part, this hurts those professions which age is an essential parameter/metric.
There are good reasons why some governments have outlawed ageists in the hiring process. Inequality of employment opportunity is increasingly exacerbated by ageist discrimination. In America, for example, a majority of job applicants have their application rejected simply due to their age. This is unreasonable and unacceptable because employers have not yet either to consider other important factors or to meet the candidate in person to impartially judge their suitability and merits but only ruled them out based on the fact that they are seemingly older than the job description. Such recruiting practice is unfair and is depriving people of the employment opportunity, and in the long term, this also adversely affected those businesses themselves because of their biases and partiality.
However, there are many fields that it would be risky and inappropriate for the post to be offered without regarding of applicant’s age. For example, MP or Member of Parliament which is just an extremely important position is now only offered for those of eighteen or above. Due to the extensive knowledge and experience needed to function as a representative of his or her public, those younger are believed to not have sufficient factors to be up for the job. Other professions would be in the entertainment industries which value age and physical appearance over merits such as acting and runway modeling. After all, to ensure viability and prosperity of their business, filmmakers or high-end fashion brands must cater to their customers’ interest, even the lowest taste which favors young and beautiful performers rather than true artistic values.
In conclusion, the disadvantages of government’s legal approach against ageists outweigh advantages. In the long run, it causes harm to many areas that candidates' age is necessary to be considered.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, regarding, so, after all, for example, in conclusion, such as, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51327433628 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.26715308708 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.589970501475 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.068838062 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.5 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.14285714286 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.164314382476 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547747900869 0.084324248473 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461233642966 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0986830401514 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635162099679 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 13.0946893788 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.14 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 78.4519038076 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.