Topic: Some people believe that the government should provide financial assistance to all artists including painter, musicians, and poets. Others think that it is a waste of money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Some would argue that financial supporting to artists is necessary, while others claim that states should utilize this money for other projects. While artists often need financial aid at the beginning of their careers, I believe that healthcare should be prioritized in the budget plan of the governments.
On the one hand, young painters and sculptors need to receive grants and loans from the government because they are not established enough to support themselves. That is to say that when they start their occupation, they are unknown to the public, so they are unable to sell their work. If they could not be granted financial aid to pursue their professional, they might have to turn to other careers to survive. For example, Nam Son, a young talent painter in Vietnam, revealed his difficult time when he was 25 years old in a newspaper recently. He said that he definitely could not create his noticeable paintings if he did not receive a special loan from the government. However, I believe that individuals do not benefit from works of art as much as they do from spending money on healthcare.
On the other hand, people, who are on the view that governments should not subsidize much for the artists, advocate that essential sectors are calling for greater funds such as medical care, education, and infrastructure. These are crucial factors, which influence massively to the life of individuals, therefore, they should be received more investment from states. For instance, in many developing countries, people still can not access adequately with advance treatments for serious diseases such as cancer, so if states could allocate more money to improve this situation, more people will be cured. I believe that it is much more worthy to spend budgets on enhancing the healthcare system.
In conclusion, although helping those working in the arts might subsidize the production of masterpieces, I believe that the public could get more benefits if the governments spend more money on the medical sector.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16616314199 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77212681335 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555891238671 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.1927108879 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.538461538 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4615384615 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.69230769231 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151639120157 0.244688304435 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0566575946355 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048636378615 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103431826502 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565673800373 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.